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Post by Faith on Feb 29, 2008 23:13:12 GMT -6
I wanted to post some of my songs for you all to read! I was hoping I could get some feedback! Tell me whatever you think of them!
XOXOXO Faith
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Post by Faith on Feb 29, 2008 23:14:54 GMT -6
"Pulse" I am not that easy to read Ever stout in my own mind A sight of cultured learning Once more I respond in questioning Easier than answering Can someone help me swallow this pill? All these vibes in the air turn around Holding me ever down One of these days I'll find utopia All on my own I am the one that's spoken of Pressing all of my buttons Your so-called sensual puppet All these vibes in the air turn around Holding me ever down One of these days I'll find utopia All on my own I am the pulse running through you An arousing bitter taste Am I better off at all? All these vibes in the air turn around Holding me ever down One of these days I'll find utopia All on my own
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Post by Faith on Feb 29, 2008 23:15:41 GMT -6
"Apron Strings"
Respondent and intriguing I light my match with sparks forged from virgin snow Light on the spackled ground Standard for ascension to my golden throne And I move across the open sea A new survivor
Factoring a simple sentimental vision With the apron strings still attached Remembering a since of faltering invention Shuddering at hands of mothering
I walk with royal hands shaking Unable to assuage the severity Lying on the edge of chaos Buckle my seat belt, hold on to the wind And I feel my way through the sun Sacred standings
Factoring a simple sentimental vision With the apron strings still attached Remembering a since of faltering invention Shuddering at hands of mothering Sitting high on pedestals of shaky wisdom Intercourse of spiritual sense Observation nearly as spectacular By interaction and experience
Feuding with my own god Tampering with letters from despondent minds Through a fractal on the wall Staring back at me from the eyes of my own mind And I go right through in a blaze I surrender my sacred philosophy
Factoring a simple sentimental vision With the apron strings still attached Remembering a since of faltering invention Shuddering at hands of mothering Sitting high on pedestals of shaky wisdom Intercourse of spiritual sense Observation nearly as spectacular By interaction and experience
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Post by Faith on Feb 29, 2008 23:16:06 GMT -6
"Lying Down Deep" Let us all begin our teachings Breaking down our walls with pseudo preachings Let us all count down to Armageddon Struck by our silence without action This is our time to reconcile ourselves With redemption to allow us all to begin Staking our clams with arrows meant for war Selfsufficiant in selfproclamed loving ways lying down deep We've not much time left to wake up tomorrow Standing on sidewalks made of softer ground We've not much time left here to finish everything Laid on our plate by God and man above This is our time to reconcile ourselves With redemption to allow us all to begin Staking our clams with arrows meant for war Selfsufficiant in selfproclamed loving ways lying down deep How I've began with miles 'till my throne When fire from outside windows shines through Light shining on me with simpler beams of gold This hope inside reborn shines in my heaven's view This is our time to reconcile ourselves With redemption to allow us all to begin Staking our clams with arrow meant for war Selfsufficiant in selfproclamed loving ways lying down deep
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Post by Angel on Feb 29, 2008 23:16:33 GMT -6
Hey I think that's great, I think a perfect title would be "Finding Utopia" or "Pulse" the original title works too Sounds very interesting! The others are amazing too! I love Apron Strings, sounds so great, finding yourself!
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Post by Faith on Feb 29, 2008 23:18:08 GMT -6
"Thunder"
I see you there across the room Watching you do the things you do Wishing you were the one I had You'll never know just what you pull right through Come away with me far off to wander We'll sail away before the darkened sky And if you ever stop before your thunder We'll watch the rain clouds roll on bye Flawlessness ain't much to me Just let me in, and then you'll see I'll take you there one at a time I'll show you where, a secret place inside Come away with me far off to wander We'll sail away before the darkened sky And if you ever stop before you thunder We'll watch the rain clouds roll on bye When the night is gone, but the sun's still sleeping When there ain't nowhere for us to go When the twilight's song is all worth singing And our souls belong, but you don't know why
Come away with me far off to wander We'll sail away before the darkened sky And if you ever stop before your thunder We'll watch the rain clouds roll on bye
Come away with me far off to wander We'll sail away before the darkened sky And if you ever stop before your thunder We'll watch the rain clouds roll on bye
When the night is gone, but the sun's still sleeping When there ain't nowhere for us to go When the twilight's song is all worth singing And our souls belong, but you don't know why
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Post by Faith on Feb 29, 2008 23:22:33 GMT -6
Aww...thank you Angel!
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Post by Faith on Feb 29, 2008 23:31:38 GMT -6
I don't really like "Thunder". It was something I wrote when I was a little...love sick. I hate the word "ain't", and I used it THREE time in "Thunder"! God, I hate that word! I'm from the south, but I still don't use it! Lol!
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Post by Faith on Feb 29, 2008 23:35:32 GMT -6
There are supposed to be names where the blanks are in this song, but I didn't want to show their names here without their approval.
"Letters Unsent"
Dear ______ I love you a lot You have a charismatic way about you with my generation and I admire that You helped me release my inner self and opened me up to a world I didn't know until right about the time that I met you You always spoke the truth and never held anything back from me as much as I wanted you to but that help me in the long run Deer _______ you rocked my world You always helped me relax when on the brink of insanity and I love you for that You were always open hearted and very supportive and caring and nurturing and simply the best in times of ultimate crises I could be dangling above jagged rocks and you'd come save me That's why you and I connect so well Dear _______ I learned so much You awakened me from a slumber from which I thought I'd never return and you got me seriously thinking about my career You will always have a place right next to me so we can talk like we have know each other all our lives I can only hope that one day I'll find someone else just like you Then I'll tell them all about you Dear _________ we never met We spoke on the phone a few times once before and that's all that I can recall You seemed really nice and like someone that I'd be interested in but that time you asked me out I said no And that stopped us from going any further than we did And that's kind of too bad 'cause we might have had a great connection Dear _____ we shared so much You were perfectly masochistic and slightly unstable for me and you understand as much as I do We could have never been as close as we were had we both not has a slight attraction to insanity of proportions grand I know you're in a relationship right now and you seem great That's why I wish you the best
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Post by Angel on Mar 1, 2008 0:03:34 GMT -6
You're truly a inspiration Faith. Your songs and letters show that, along with your role playing abilities! Have some of your works been published? If not I think they should! You have real talent!
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Post by Faith on Mar 1, 2008 1:14:17 GMT -6
No, unfortunately none of my works have been published, but I'm working on a novel right now! I don't have high expectations for it, but it's called "Eternal Night" and the preface for it is in my thread called The Collection! It's going to become a collection of short stories! I just posted "Eternal Night" in The Collection because I think that the preface can sort of stand on it's own as a short story.
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Post by Angel on Mar 2, 2008 14:45:07 GMT -6
Sweet! I'll check it out and I'm sure it will have good expectations
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Post by kate on Mar 4, 2008 17:52:54 GMT -6
Very awesome and emotional.
I've been trying to write my own music lately (I play the guitar), but it hasn't been working. Probably should stick to playing horrible and writing stories. =]
I agree with Alex, you should publish it.
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Post by Faith on Mar 5, 2008 20:57:50 GMT -6
Thanks! They're all very autobiographical. I really try to put my entire self into my art. I often break down into tears when I finish a song just because I'm releasing so much.
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Post by kate on Mar 5, 2008 21:47:05 GMT -6
I love reading about people's emotions and what not. It makes me happy to know I'm not the only one feeling that particular way, if that makes sense.
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